100 WC WEEK #2
We were speeding to see the new star wars movie, we didn't think we were going to make it. But we just go there in time. As I joined the queue, there was a guy dressed up as Darth Vader and he was trying to eat to eat popcorn threw his mask but he couldn't. He tried and tried but he couldn't he ended up getting so mad he threw his popcorn at the manager and got kicked out of the theatre. That day i learned not to get so angry and a movie theatre.
Star Wars should be capitalized. When you talk about the guy eating popcorn, instead of threw it should be through. You also need to capitalize your i in the last sentence.
ReplyDeleteOn the second sentence I think you can change the word go to arrive or got. On the last sentence you need to make the I capitalized and you should make the word and to in.
ReplyDeleteYou added to eat twice and instead of got I think you ment got but nice ending.
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